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Surgery

October11

Here is my post in the Octpowrimo marathon. This is in response to Sonalika’s post

Let not
each word you write
be chiselled and carved
with Occam’s razor.
Piercing hearts
is also a doctor’s game.
While he cleans the dark,
swindles life;
She with her blades of gazes,
amongst the war of emotions,
makes it worth the life
his quill always seeked.

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I wasn’t aware that Octpowrimo works on prompts and Nimue links me whenever I write. I just saw the prompt was on sounds and I got reminded of this older poem that talks about sounds in rain. I dedicate this to Octpowrimo. Please bear with me.

Rain
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I was caught up somewhere in the rain today, then I took a shelter under a tin roof of a small shop. It was then that I noticed the sound of raindrops.. playing like an orchestra .. a different sweet music of its own.. tippy tapping …very random.. yet very musical.. At first it was grrrr feeling .. then it went greener .. full of varied emotions .. mixed feelings…tense, excited, sad, euphoric, pleasing strangely… this poem is the grrr to green in my life.. its about the desire .. which is desired .. denied .. achieved .. quenched .. resulting wrinkles … tensions around and then it dies .. In the following lines, I have tried to capture what I went through in the lovely evening.

Here it goes.

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Shoulders clutched,
Shrieking pain
Tattering leaves
Crying for Rain

Darkened doorway
Lightening scrawled
Grippling, thundering
Child’s appal

Spasmodic, tumbling
Roaring and silent,
Heavy, moisturous
Pleasing and violent

Timpani, chatter, clatter
Rap, tap, rattatat
Staccato drumming
Rhythm of the rain
Sipping away all the pain

Furious, noisy
Dark and grey
Settling equations
With sun’s fray

Revenge, cries or snare
God’s anger or despair
Eternal bliss or divine chant
Raingod arrows every flair

Drops fall,
Wrinkle the sea
Purge, diminish,
Then die utterly

Thirsty leaves
Drink it all
Drop by drop
Until the rain stops

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6 Comments to

“Surgery”

  1. On October 11th, 2013 at 5:09 pm Nimue Says:

    I like it :)
    Makes me think of an image , I will try to draw some day soon ..

  2. On October 11th, 2013 at 6:39 pm Nimue Says:

    And I love the second poem !! Superb :D

  3. On October 11th, 2013 at 6:41 pm admin Says:

    Thank you Nimue! :-) Octpowrimo is all about October and Poetry. And so are you. Its your Birth Day Month!! :D Am waiting for the weekend!

    And please post the image when you are done. Looking forward.

    Cheers!!
    Nave

  4. On October 11th, 2013 at 7:00 pm snlkc Says:

    The response and the Sound poem, both were brilliantly executed. I especially like :

    “While he cleans the dark,
    swindles life..”

    :) :)

    Honoured that you chose my poem to respond to :)

  5. On October 11th, 2013 at 7:57 pm zoe Says:

    Both poems are quite vivid… really nice.

  6. On October 11th, 2013 at 8:27 pm Aavika Dhanda Says:

    your words are magical! and spell bounding! amazing! amazing! :)

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