Friendship…

April6

Feathering on the couch as i lay,
Relishing the movie on air.
Ignited the passionate love in me,
Enthused by the scenes that flared.

Nailed by the script as it flowed,
Dealing the real in imaginary.
Seduced by the romance in awe,
Hushed by climax that had me.

Incidently a brown bug I saw,
Pair of wings how fast it flew.
Flying in the proximity as it did,
Randomized my curiousity avid.

I sprang off the sofa in dizzy,
Enervated in unsettled faze;
Napping its blow, its sting;
Drove me out of the ring in rage.

Scared a little, a little composed;
Heroically I reconciled my fears;
I fenced with the newspaper sword;
Penetrating its buzz.. interpreting WORDS

FRIENDSHIP !! FRIENDSHIP !! Is all I seek..

***

This is inspired by a true incident; today, when I was sitting on my sofa enjoying a romantic flick, just when a bee invaded my privacy, my tranquility.. I was horrified at first, then as if I realised, that it wanted not to harm, but befriend me, so that we enjoy the movie together I wanted to write something different for this prompt, so I thought this would do.. Dunno if it fits..

This Acrostic is written for Acrostic Only, run by sweet Amias

posted under Cherishing Life, My Frankenstein Lab, Personal Thoughts, PunchBag

23 Comments to

“Friendship…”

On April 6th, 2009 at 1:41 am Winnie the poohi Says:
Now it makes sense

A moment wonderfully captured
On April 6th, 2009 at 6:03 am Maggie Says:
Fun-type story on Friendship told in a poetic way.
On April 6th, 2009 at 9:12 am Vinay Says:
hi navin. i loved that double acrostic on friendship!

somewhat a different concept! loved the ending line…

indeed friendship is all i seek!
On April 6th, 2009 at 1:46 pm Amias Says:
This was a good poem about what you seek, but I didn’t see the friendship until the end … outside the acrostic.

Still, this is real poetic, and great images.
On April 6th, 2009 at 2:52 pm admin Says:
@Winnie

Thank you Dear
On April 6th, 2009 at 2:57 pm admin Says:
@Maggie

Thank you for your visit Maggie God Bless !!
On April 6th, 2009 at 2:59 pm admin Says:
@Vinay

Glad you liked it Vinay We are already friends I guess
On April 6th, 2009 at 3:11 pm admin Says:
@Amias

I believe acrostics are also puzzles and the idea is to present the cryptic message in the first, last or middle letters of the verses.. not throwing the OBVIOUS to the readers but there is a catch and thats what makes it interesting

I ld like to share something more … some of the posts where I go too poetic usually has a semantic alternative idea crypted in the poem identified with some other not so important incident that happens in due course of life .. In short if you notice I have tried to use most of the colors of emotions that we go thru in friendship .. friendship is about ignited passions, relishing the moments, nailed to the unwritten bond of friendship, sometimes hushed, enthused, randomized feeliings .. it is also about the times when we run away from our peers, friends and ourselves, fencing everyone and thats when only a friend comes to the rescue after us, without even bothering if he/she gets compromised in the process .. at times they also seem to be no more than a bug … we presume so many actions.. its the sting and feel scary about it .. finding that we are alone .. only to realise later, it is but true friendship .. and finally fall in .. to enjoy the moments of life .. TOGETHER so thats what this post is all about

Thank you Amias for your encouragement and support.. Cheers !! God Bless!!
On April 6th, 2009 at 4:29 pm Vinay Says:
yes bro… we definietely are…
On April 6th, 2009 at 9:03 pm Amias Says:
I know you are right, Acrostic can be a puzzle and that is why I love them. The trick to me is to learn to used as few words as possible to convey the message. I work hard to prefect it, and have a long ways to go.

However, there are strict rules to acrostic, the whole acrostic should stick to the the subject. And dividing the words where there are no syllables break can be confusing.

You are such a talented writer, one can get away with anything if the poem is good … but does it make it an acrostic?

I appreciate you joining us, Nave, because you bring a lot to this group, and it such an enjoyment, not only reading your contribution each week, but also reading the your comments to myself and others. Thank you.
On April 6th, 2009 at 9:46 pm Sea Biscuit Says:
How, just how do you manage to present any real-life situation into a beautiful poetry??? TEMME….NOW
On April 6th, 2009 at 9:53 pm americanising desi Says:
i loved your treatment and the contents of the poem.
On April 6th, 2009 at 10:14 pm Ofira Sephiroth Says:
The second stanza is powerful.
On April 6th, 2009 at 11:17 pm admin Says:
@Amias

Dear Amias,

I respect and accept your inputs. Thank you maam : )

I first came across Acrostics while dealing with some ciphers when i was into cryptography around six-seven years back. The word Acrostic comes from Greek word Akros(Top) + Stics(verse). Usually the first, middle or last alphabets when read top-down, or skip read(at patterns) at words, or lines, or verses which form meaningful phrase/words; then its an acrostic. I googled up a bit to satisfy my curiosity and found that it doesn’t necessarily have to be separated by syllables. You might want to consider looking at the earlier usage of acrostics in the prophecies of the Erythraean Sibyl, or even the Hebrew Bible. The best can be found in the triple acrostic by Thomas Browne However, if it is a constraint put for the prompts at Acrostic Only, I respect it and will attempt it in that way

I have updated my post so that there are no syllable breaks now

Also I dont think the word formations in acrostic strictly have to point at the whole subject, it can be the source to the subject, lead to a conclusion, define the body of the content and also can be something totally different(specially in the crypted acrostic messages).

You definitely master this type of poetry Amias and most of the times, am amazed by the simplicity and punch of your muse. Its a treat to read and offers us lot to learn : ) I really admire your work and this initiative of yours.. specially how religiously you encourage all fellow participants.. It is Commendable!!!

Thank you so much for taking time to respond, despite your busy schedule. It was a learning curve for me, and am very thankful for that.

May God Bless!! : )
On April 6th, 2009 at 11:20 pm admin Says:
@Seabiscuit
You are kind to me
On April 6th, 2009 at 11:20 pm admin Says:
@americanising desi

Thank you dear !!
On April 6th, 2009 at 11:21 pm admin Says:
@Ofira

Happy you liked it Ofira
On April 7th, 2009 at 3:45 pm Anthony North Says:
Marvellously done!
On April 8th, 2009 at 4:47 am Tan Says:
Well Done… I mean, the writeup and the usage of FRIENDSHIP twice was fun to read!!

Keep writing
On April 8th, 2009 at 11:46 am sudharm baxi Says:
It certainly fits and fits very well. Good job!!
And glad that you did not kill the friendly bee
On April 8th, 2009 at 6:11 pm admin Says:
Thank you Anthony equally loved your take on Fragments
On April 8th, 2009 at 6:11 pm admin Says:
@Tan
Thanks buddy
On April 8th, 2009 at 6:12 pm admin Says:
@Sudharm Baxi
thanks mate .. and welcome